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sparkystar22


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Hey. I love you guys all! *hugs* Thanks for everything you do. But I want to show a couple poem I wrote recently. Here are a couple...


Someone


My guise was broken. I no longer merge them.
And the frozen ice pierced. The radiant tears glowed,
Like a crimson lips brighten me. And I no longed to desire.
My feelings devoured, just like the flame dismissed slowly.
But I saw someone, the flame ingnite deep inside of my heart
And the feeling of hunger was so profound.
Slowly the frozen ice came with the warmth of evnanese.
And I absorbed myself into a perfect puzzle.
 
Love
 
As the time goes, as time is so precious, it smoothes us.
The enchanted slick. And the depth of wreath comes with the blossoms,
The amity becomes stronger, can I dearly love?
By that dear name I dream to aspire, the reams are sufficient,
Because you love me dearly, a broken heart always will not be lost.
And where the flaws deformed in me, you help me to dream.
Hands bestown upon me. And I take them in my heart.
Character is a painting art, you are the trace.
You leave traces on my soul.
And I love you
 
What do you guys think? Let me know. Thanks all!
 
Katie

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fuscia


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are you talking about God, someone special, or both?

they are puuuurrty katie.


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sparkystar22


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yeah it's about both. thanks peggy.


and now we know that this is a small community, actually one of the nicest community i've been to. yet not many of you all have not replied to this post.  you know, i expect more, y'all. but if you guys cant do that, i guess that's okay. i just will keep wondering what people think about this poem.


later.



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fuscia


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that's neat. i luv poems with layers and multiple interpretations. adds so much depth and emotions.



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That was awesome! My site accepts poetry too that anyone can post!  http://valsignalandet.com/repository.php <-- click there! :) Would love to receive your work if you want


Phil


 



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TaterHead


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Beautiful! And straight from the heart!

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Katie:
As Always your poetry is just what one needs, and it really helped me today getting over some rough spots which have happened in my life this past week.

Thanks again and blessings
Dave

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sparkystar22


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Hey Phil, I'll get in and look what I can about your websites. I tried to get in, but I get lost. Lol. Will figure it out tomorrow.

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The first poem is gorgeous. It shows me many layers, and pictures.

I will write more tomorrow when I wake back up.

Promise.

I love them both...I actually have a lot to say about both. I'll sleep on my thoughts!

*big hugs*

Love you my friend.
Darrel

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